Short film I made for class.

[Dex]

Acting is horrible but I edited, wrote and directed it. Feedback is appreciated,

[jasonluckydog]

[jasonluckydog]

I liked it thought that was pretty cool, enjoyed the ending.

[Dex]

  On 12/10/2012 at 4:56 AM, jasonluckydog said:

I liked it thought that was pretty cool, enjoyed the ending.

Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

[SZ James (banned)]

You in film school? Which one?

Also, what did you have to do with making this?

nvm

[Dex]

  On 12/10/2012 at 5:58 AM, Sheikh Zula said:

You in film school? Which one?

Also, what did you have to do with making this?

nvm

Couldn't afford film school. Working my way through community college. Hopefully get an internship and continue my education. Also what?

[SZ James (banned)]

One thing I'll say about film school in general.

Don't be pressured into making more serious stuff unless you want to. Everything you make right now is going to be absolute crap and down the road you will look back and cringe at just how awful your early stuff was. I made sure some of mine were never going to see the light of day and burned that poo to the ground. The main thing is your getting it out of your system and you are learning how it all works.

So don't be afraid to have fun with it and generate the lulz.

[SZ James (banned)]

  On 12/10/2012 at 6:04 AM, SBVG said:

Couldn't afford film school. Working my way through community college. Hopefully get an internship and continue my education. Also what?

Oic.

Get an internship where? What are you aiming for exactly?

e: also sorry for the invasiveness I'm just curious

[Dex]

  On 12/10/2012 at 6:12 AM, Sheikh Zula said:

Oic.

Get an internship where? What are you aiming for exactly?

e: also sorry for the invasiveness I'm just curious

Well I'd love to work for myself at some point but possibly an internship for a studio maybe learn under other directors, cinematographers. Also you were a film major? If so do you have any feedback for my video?

[SZ James (banned)]

Yes, for a short while at least

I'm goin to bed but I might type out something tomorrow...

[Dex]

  On 12/10/2012 at 6:25 AM, Sheikh Zula said:

Yes, for a short while at least

I'm goin to bed but I might type out something tomorrow...

Alright sounds good.

[SZ James (banned)]

First, I'm not at all an expert and you don't have to take anything I say as the gospel. I'm guessing you just want a few simple thoughts.

You said directing and cinematography, so I'll focus on that. The intro was the part I liked the most. Good music, locations, etc. I noticed when you had two guys standing from across the room you panned from one person to the next as they each spoke. It could just be because I have a headache atm, but it's a bit nauseating. Maybe just reframe so that everyone is onscreen or stick to a shot/countershot. Same goes for the scene on the porch. Show both actors on screen if they're supposed to be talking to each other.

That's really all I got for now unless you want something more specific. I'm still learning this sh*t too.

e: The intro was my favorite part is what I meant to type.

[Dex]

No really thank you for the insight and yes the intro is my favourite part as well. I love no dialogue scenes in my films with only music to tell the story. I did the same thing with one of my past films.

There were several issues after it was rendering like in the beginning the faded black shots were supposed to have the other video track that was overlayed in their spot. Also just a few bad scene changes when my girlfriend was moving.

[SZ James (banned)]

I was gonna say that you would probably be good at making non-narrative stuff and whathaveyou

Short films are harder for me and many others because I'm geared towards developing characters and other nonsense. You have to think of it as telling a short joke.

Not much back story, and every detail must be essential to the punchline or else it won't be funny. If all that makes sense.